Our challenge this week is to write a post based on this picture:
When I saw her staggering towards me, I knew she was in trouble. I was on my way to hand over crucial documents to in a highly sensitive case involving a crime syndicate, but I couldn’t help myself from going into action mode when I saw this girl in trouble.
Instinctively I moved in closer to catch her as I could see she was on the verge of collapse. As I let her lean against me, I held her as though in an embrace, both to protect her and to scan the surrounding area. The warmth of her blood was seeping through on to my shirt, her wound was bleeding badly. My years as a private detective taught me to survey the area in-depth. Someone here had a knife, dripping with blood on their person, trying to cover their movements with an air of casualness.
The elderly man in the striped shirt seemed harmless enough, it seemed as though he had his wife with him or perhaps she was a companion. Ahead of them, another elderly man in a blue shirt and what may be a camera bag slung around his shoulder. They formed the picture of harmlessness, a perfect disguise for a crime in public, but then I caught a glimpse of the quick scurry and stressed movements by a tall man in the green T-shirt. Was he trying to force the door open? The woman just behind him was trying to act casual but her folded arms were dead a giveaway. They had spotted me grab the girl, they knew it was not an embrace because they knew what I must have seen…
I called over to the older man in the blue shirt to call for help as I gently rested the girl against the wall, the man came rushing over stating that he was a doctor. I reached for my gun from my shoulder holster and started the chase. The couple had managed to open the door.
The inside of the building was dark and damp. I had to stand still for a minute using my senses to hear any sounds, all the time wishing that my eyes would adjust to the dark quicker. Quietly I followed the voices I could hear in the distance. The voices were getting a little louder as I etched in closer. I realised that the couple thought they got away with their crime, but little did they know that I was on to them. The minute I stepped into the room, they both stared at me without blinking an eye lid. It was then that I knew that I fell into a cleverly laid trap and that I was in just as much trouble as the girl.
Staring at them in amazement and cursing myself for my own stupidity, I slowly levelled my hand gun in their direction. The dark haired woman even smiled at me, sort of sardonically as though she was going to crack up laughing any minute. Just then, I felt the very cold barrel of a gun pushing into the back of my neck and a voice ordering me to drop the gun.
As I dropped the gun I turned and was face to face with the man in the blue shirt, the girl from the street, standing next to him, right as rain, smiling at me with a smile as cold as the person she must be. She ripped the small plastic bag filled with red liquid from her body and flung it on the ground.
I had made the biggest mistake of my life, I fell into a trap, set up especially for me, by people who had studied me an knew how I would react. My life was now in these people’s hands. Grimly, I handed the documents over cursing myself for not following my first instincts about this group of people forming an innocent picture and yet they were playing out a perfect crime.
I knew I would get out of this jam, I just didn’t know how…
I did enjoy this – never again will I take a quick look at a picture and think oh so ordinary. I love the way you hooked everyone in the picture into the story
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That. Was. Awesome. More!!! 🙂
It is my first try at this Simon, so I’m on shaky ground at the moment 🙂
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It’s really good… you HAVE to keep writing this story now…
I think I might 🙂
I’m sure it’s going to be brilliant. Such talent, it makes me sick with jealousy 🙂
You are very kind 🙂
I’m very honest 🙂
Oh wow! You’ve given it a really new angle! Superb! 😀
Thank you so much 🙂
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Wow. Loved it, especially the detail, description and the incorporation of other people into the story. Not shaky at all!
Thank you very much, I was a little nervous posting this one.
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Heehee – liked it a lot. Now you have to complete the novel. Stephen King…watch out, you’ve got some serious competition!
LOL, thanks Amos, I tried 🙂
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Amazing.! Truly a very different perspective.. 🙂
Thank you so much 🙂
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Wow – I loved it. Thanks. 🙂
Thank you for reading 🙂
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Loved this!! Your writing is so engaging!! xx
Thank you so much 🙂
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Wowza! I’m heartbroken that it was only 1000 words! Keep writing!!! I want to know more!! 🙂 You have talent!
Thanks, I’ll try 🙂
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thank you for stopping by my blog and liking it, that gave me the chance to meet yours and i gotta tell you: it’s great!:) hope to see you soon
Thank you for the visit too 🙂
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Wow, great story! I agree, more please!
Thanks so much.
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amazing story, liked it, check mines out
http://reesarch.wordpress.com/2013/01/29/weekly-writing-challenge-1000-words-take-two/
Thanks, will pop over 🙂
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Damn… your good… when you writing the novel.???
LOL, not sure if I can Bulldog 🙂
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Not to put more pressure on you, but just how does he get out of this one?
I have the next installment in my head and have to get it out in words 🙂
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Yea! Now all we have to do is be patient.
*smiles* thank you, I feel encouraged to write more 🙂
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Loved your story. This sounds as if can become a book. Please don’t stop!
Thank you dear Rita, I’m glad you like it 🙂
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Coo! Thrilling stuff – well done that girl 🙂
Thanks so much 🙂
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That’s a great effort! Do I sense a future author within our midst? 😉
Author, I wish TA 🙂
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Just when I thought it was going to go all conventionally, you pulled that twist! Well done!
Thanks Col 🙂 I love having a twist 🙂
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Love it! You definitely should enter the Dragon Contest! 🙂
I might give it a try, Lorna 🙂
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OMG.. You should write more often! You are so good! Loved the story and lets have the next part soon! 🙂
Thanks muZer 🙂
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And no one noticed the ninja on the roof of the tram. . . ;o)
Hehe, must have done it with mirrors.
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this is absolutely fantastic! You have an amazing imagination and a real talent for short story writing, I am impressed, not that I doubted you!
Thanks art, I am a bit dubious about my own writing. I have written a few things, but have not posted them for that reason.
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really nice story 🙂 but ur font style made bit difficult to read easily…
Thank you so much for your feedback, I really appreciate it. I have since changed my theme, so I think it looks a little better now 🙂
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I did enjoy this – never again will I take a quick look at a picture and think oh so ordinary. I love the way you hooked everyone in the picture into the story
Thank you so much elspethc 🙂
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Yes, good story, good plot…now, what? 🙂
Well, I s’pose I have to write the rest of it then 🙂
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